And Smash! The glass shatters, a smattering of cracks and littering smithereens Fear seeps in and smuggles safety out between into the darkest night Smiter of electric light, the wind howls triumphant She imagines his smug smile as he leaves smudges on the walls
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21 thoughts on “Violent Nature”
Beautifully written Maria 🙌
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Wonderful use of alliteration.
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… Fear seeps in and smuggles safety out between
into the darkest night…
This is so good, Maria…
<3 David
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Oh I love a good storm. It was very windy here today and there is debris all over the road wild and turbulent like your poem.
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Oh, this has an impact. I like your use of sharp sounding words in this – it puts emphasis on the violence. A great quadrille.
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I really felt the force of the violent nature evoked in your quadrille, Maria. The violent word, particularly ‘smattering’ and ‘smithereens’ give it force, and the sibilance in the final lines, the ‘smug smile’ and the ‘smudges on the walls’ make the ending satisfying.
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Thank you. I had fun exploring all the words that start with “sm.”
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Indeed, and now as fall is coming it arrives with even more violence.
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So true.
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Frightening imagery. Much enjoyed.
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I’m glad you liked it.
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There are some simply fantastic word choices here:
smattering, smithereens, smiter, smug, smudges
Even all wonderful alteration aside, just some powerful words. So good.
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Thank you so much.
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A wonderful use of he prompt! I love what you did with it.
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You are welcome!
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And in her imagining he has her in the grip of his fist. Domestic violence is insidious and not taken nearly seriously enough by any level of the government.
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Beautifully written Maria 🙌
Thank you.
Wonderful use of alliteration.
Thank you.
This is so good, Maria…
<3
David
Thank you.
Oh I love a good storm. It was very windy here today and there is debris all over the road wild and turbulent like your poem.
Oh, this has an impact. I like your use of sharp sounding words in this – it puts emphasis on the violence. A great quadrille.
Thank you.
I really felt the force of the violent nature evoked in your quadrille, Maria. The violent word, particularly ‘smattering’ and ‘smithereens’ give it force, and the sibilance in the final lines, the ‘smug smile’ and the ‘smudges on the walls’ make the ending satisfying.
Thank you. I had fun exploring all the words that start with “sm.”
Indeed, and now as fall is coming it arrives with even more violence.
So true.
Frightening imagery. Much enjoyed.
I’m glad you liked it.
There are some simply fantastic word choices here:
smattering, smithereens, smiter, smug, smudges
Even all wonderful alteration aside, just some powerful words. So good.
Thank you so much.
A wonderful use of he prompt! I love what you did with it.
Thank you.
You are welcome!
And in her imagining he has her in the grip of his fist. Domestic violence is insidious and not taken nearly seriously enough by any level of the government.