
Today at the dVerse Poets Pub, the Poetics prompt is to write an opposite poem. Lisa offered up an amazing video called The Opposites Game from TED Ed that I highly recommend watching.
I thought it would be fun to start with one of my own old poems and create its “opposite.” I started with a NaPoWriMo poem from last year called A future voice in the dark.
Another future voice in the dark
You demand I unlearn the light
leaving the past unseen
stacattos played allegro
under the facades of blank stares
that direct route
the straight line is known
weightless without speed
smooth without old disadvantages
many blank surfaces, many original sounds
severe, substantial discomforts
close cacophonies of
what will be
That was really fun. Reminded me of the poetry MadLibs I did with some of my old poems last summer. (Those this one makes a lot more sense). I think I’ll be trying this technique a lot more. This could lead to some nice two-column, reflective poems.
There’s a lot to think about in there! Well done, in such a short poem.
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Very nicely done!
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Thank you.
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👏 Maria 👏
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I enjoyed both poems, a fine exercise in reversal! I love ‘close cacophonies of
what will be.’
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Both poems are a lovely read, specially the opening lines. It opens up a world of possibilities.
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Maria I am glad you enjoyed the challenge and I enjoyed looking at both of your poems. They definitely work well together as a pair, like being able to see the ripples from each path.
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I absolutely love, love this! Fantastic flip of the original poem, “Is the crooked line imagined?
this jag in the path weighted with time” to “that direct route the straight line is known
weightless without speed.” 💝
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Thank you. The opposites game is a fun way to explore poetry revision.
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