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For today’s Meet the Bar prompt, Björn introduces us to the work of John Donne and invites us to follow his eighteen line heroic sonnet form. The line about honey in Donne’s poem made me think of a couple Proverbs about honey, so I thought I would rewrite them to fit into the form.
The Token Sent
How you entreat for signs of affection
Physical labors would help you to rest
Here is some honey to ease your tension
Watch out it will drip and stick to your breast
Too much honey is bad for your body
and so is trying to win too much praise
your bawdy talk of passions so naughty
and desires written down here so brazen
This golden symbol of our lives entwined
a treasure to savor upon the tongue
viscous union like our hearts’ blood aligned
but this small pot of honey won’t last long
When you are full, you will refuse honey
but when you are hungry, all food tastes sweet
I can already sense your heart running
and hear the tap of your unsettled feet
Send not honey to a love so needy
He will get sticky and wide-eyed greedy
Today’s image
Still excited by exploring my work as triptychs, I played with a horizontal format.
I love the way you challenge the metaphor of honey itself… myself I fine honey way too sweet (but you can ferment it to mead)
It’s hard to combine love with need. (K)
Gorgeously done! 💖💖💖
Thank you.
Well done!
Thank you.
Aside from being smoothly and beautifully written, Maria, this is so darn’d clever!
Much love,
David
Thank you!
Nice and fluid as it flows down the page. I like how you lead the reader along to the conclusion.
Honey is beautiful in word and deed,
but too much of anything fills one with dread.
It was a tricky form for me. I’m glad you liked it.
This one made me smile! You know Pooh Bears love honey! Never get too much! Very well done!
Thank you. Glad to put a smile on your face.
You are welcome!